Love the fact that you've captured the tender feelings in this scene, while creating the sense of excitement one would feel, with the trochaic structure. Nice!
Love the lines: "first kiss so far" Thanks for sharing this excerpt with us today - I look forward to more from this novel and/or the whole novel when it's available. =)
Great ending, Charles. So there is a boy, and a girl (or maybe not) in this novel in verse. There is love, but what else? I want to know more. Please share more of these poems.
Charles, your range is rather impressive, from tickles to kisses! I wasn't prepared for this to develop to its very effective ending. Looking forward to more about your novel.
That pretty much sums it up! Poems like these please me no end - we get so much in so little! :)
ReplyDeleteLove the fact that you've captured the tender feelings in this scene, while creating the sense of excitement one would feel, with the trochaic structure. Nice!
ReplyDeleteOh, a novel in verse? Exciting. Thanks for sharing this sample poem. :)
ReplyDeleteSo far...
ReplyDeleteWhich means of course - there is much hope for more in the future.
More kisses. More story.
Love the lines:
ReplyDelete"first kiss
so far"
Thanks for sharing this excerpt with us today - I look forward to more from this novel and/or the whole novel when it's available. =)
Great ending, Charles.
ReplyDeleteSo there is a boy, and a girl (or maybe not)
in this novel in verse. There is love,
but what else?
I want to know more. Please share more of these poems.
Thanks for the verbal hugs and kisses!
ReplyDeleteCan't wait for more!
ReplyDeleteCharles, your range is rather impressive, from tickles to kisses! I wasn't prepared for this to develop to its very effective ending. Looking forward to more about your novel.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Heidi and Mary Lee. I appreciate your kind comments and asking for "more."
ReplyDeleteThanks, too, Heidi for hosting us all this week. It's always a treat to read our Poetry Friday friends.
Thanks for sharing - and count me in the "More!" camp!
ReplyDeleteThank you all so much for asking for "more" of FIRST KISS. I have posted another Chapter on the blog. Hope you enjoy it.
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